Tuesday, January 5, 2010

First semester portfolio- A piece I'd like to revise

The piece I would like to revise is the one I wrote in the second quarter that was about hunting. This is a haiku poem I wrote. My ideas in writing this came from thinking of my best friend Matt because he always hunts and I know he even cleans his kills. So I wrote about it...


Hunting
Pheasants everywhere
All hearing the CRACK of guns

Darting for tall corn

... In this piece i thought I could've gone back and revised it and used some better and bigger words. I also could've used some bigger adjectives to describe my nouns.

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